Inquiry I Edits
After reading through my peer's responses on my essay, I want to add deeper analysis in a few places in my essay in which I feel like the analysis is a little weak. Also, I might move one paragraph around and respond to two questions that my peers brought up. I would do this by adding more detail about the scene in one paragraph of my paper.
Essay Outline
1st Paragraph: Introduction and thesis
2nd Paragraph: Analysis of first half of dance and first 2 songs
3rd Paragraph: Camera focus on family & friends
4th Paragraph: Final song of dance analysis
5th Paragraph: Conclusion
Essay Outline
1st Paragraph: Introduction and thesis
2nd Paragraph: Analysis of first half of dance and first 2 songs
3rd Paragraph: Camera focus on family & friends
4th Paragraph: Final song of dance analysis
5th Paragraph: Conclusion